What we want you to do this weekend is to give us a 33-word opening line to your book. That's it. Make us want to read the next 333 pages of your work.
As Victoria poured over the list of countries that did not have extradition treaties with the U.S., she automatically wrote off those that were at war or otherwise unstable; but, the Maldives...interesting.
I don't know which got me more: the story or that magnificent photo. Either way, I'm all for a change of life scenery. Good hook!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jeanna! Poor Victoria needs to get out of the country - fast!
Delete"Extradition" was a nice, fascinating touch. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks - that is a key part of Victoria's travel plans :)
Deletevery interesting... i wonder what the story behind this story is!
ReplyDeleteShe has to get the kids out of the country...
DeleteOk, I want to read more. And justo you know how much I adore and cherish our writerly friendship, I'm using precious prepaid Internet moments to reach you:) do home tomorrow back on land. I saw.from the ship the most fabulous sunset tonight. That made my trip.
ReplyDeleteAwww...nice! I know - I feel like we are "real" friends too! I'll be a ship board sunset is great!
DeleteOooh, what's Victoria running away from??? Intriguing!
ReplyDeleteShe has to be outside the reach of the long arm of Uncle Sam in order to protect her children.
Deleteooh, even more interesting...I was semi-hooked with that first line. Now, you've got me hook, line and sinker :) And the fact that it's a water story...even more! What I wouldn't give to be there right now lol
DeleteThanks, Megan! Google the Maldives...paradise...!
DeleteNice job. I really want to know what she did (or who is in her trunk) which would make extradition a possiblity :)
ReplyDeleteShe's trying to save the kids. She is going to be in contempt of court for defying a court order...
DeleteWhat an interesting first line. Sounds like an intriguing story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tessa! Appreciate the feedback :)
DeleteHaving read all the comments I can see that this is going to be an interesting story.
ReplyDeleteGood first line Libby..x
Thank you, so much Rosalind :)
DeleteThat sounds like a wonderful start and the comments that follow make me want to pre-order your book :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Corinne! That is a huge compliment!
DeleteRunning sucks. Must be some bad people after her.
ReplyDeleteThe worst of the worst... :(
DeleteOooooh, "extradition" was the hook here. And the Maldives are on MY bucket list. I'd choose there if I was on the Lam.
ReplyDeleteI know-right? Now you know what to do if things ever go badly for you in the US!
DeleteWonder what kind of trouble she's in? Escape to the Maldives sounds delightful!
ReplyDeleteShe is just covering all contingencies in case she loses her court case...
DeleteDefinitely intriguing....I wonder if it shouldn't be flipped with the comment about the Maldives coming first....
ReplyDeleteI actually tried putting the sentence together a few ways and settled on this, so as to reveal 'The Maldives' at the end!
DeleteYep, I'd definitely keep going. I'd want to know why she was seeking extradition...
ReplyDeleteShe is trying to avoid extradition :)
DeleteNice - I want to know why she's going. I'm intrigued by her method of choosing a place to go.
ReplyDeleteWell, the extradition thing was the biggest priority. And, then within that list, it is hard to find something decent...
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ReplyDeleteThat.looks.heavenly! I'm wondering what adventures she could have there.
ReplyDeleteI didn't know about the Maldives, until one day when I needed to know who did not have extradition treaties with the US... I googled it for more info and was really blown away by the pictures...
DeleteI am totally on board for that kind of change. Thanks for linking up this week. Please come on back for the new prompt on Monday.
ReplyDeleteAll the Trifectans can run off together :)
DeleteOh excellent! Mmmh, wonder what Victoria has been up to...
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
She's been a busy girl!
DeleteWonderful start
ReplyDeleteOhhh.. I want more!
ReplyDeleteGreat 33.
I'm reading through all the Trifecta pieces, and am LOVING it!
So happy I found your page. Will definitely be back.
Christine
@thatgalkiki
Absolutely caught my interest, and I appreciate that you weren't compelled to include the back story.
ReplyDeleteTotally distracting photo... I want to go there... But what did she do?
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