It wasn't the first time he had been chased. He crawled 100 yards through muddy rows of corn until he reached the woods.
He paused and reflected. He really needed to start paying for his meals in restaurants.
This is my submission for the Trifextra Weekend Writing Challenge! This weekend we had to start a story with the words, "It wasn't the first time..." and finish it with exactly 33 more words!
This is great!
ReplyDeleteLOL! Glad you liked it :)
DeleteAnother great submission Libby :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Whirls! :)
DeleteGreat job! Funny :)
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it!!
DeleteThis is brilliant! It has left me with a great big smile on my face!
ReplyDeleteAnna :o] at http://puzzelicious.blogspot.com
LOL! Thanks...it is based on one of my friends from back in the day.
DeleteWhat a great visual!
ReplyDeleteThis, to me, is a traditional " Dine and Dash. Risky! Just sayin'. So fun!
ReplyDeleteI'm loving this. Excellent.
ReplyDeleteThis made me smile (and today, that's not easy).
ReplyDeleteSo funny!!! Wish I could say I never did that back in college, but ya gotta do what ya gotta do sometimes ya know?
ReplyDeleteDine and dash--when you're hungry, you're hungry, right? Well done!
ReplyDeleteHah! By now, he should know that is is easier to pay than to crawl in the mud. But that won't be as exciting eh? :-) Nice one.
ReplyDelete~Imelda
Ha! Nice ending.
ReplyDeleteSuch a unique thought. I enjoyed reading this one.
ReplyDeleteLOL! I like this a lot.
ReplyDeleteThis one made me laugh out loud at the end. One of my favorites.
ReplyDeleteLibby, I very much think your submission is excellent. I think I am going to write one myself soon -- however, as I made a few initial stabs at it, I found their proviso of not repeating the original words quite difficult. At the end, the Trifecta folks say this: (The five words are not to be included in your 33 words). Which leads me to my next point, which is that you are using the word "the" in your piece, I think you will have to adjust that for your entry to count.
ReplyDeleteAll the best to you, and Good Luck, you Dine-and-Dasher!
-- Cip
Hi, I got your reply at my blog vis a vis (Cip! I think they mean not to include the 5 in the 33 word count. You think?) and I agree, but the word "the" is one of the five words in the original sentence. So they mean [the way I interpret it] that you cannot use the word "the" in your 33 words. This "wood" [<-- get it?] mean maybe changing your response from "the woods" to.... "a woodland" or some such thing.
DeleteI busted up at the end! That was such a sweet surprise. Thanks for the smile on my face today!
ReplyDeleteHi Libby, hey -- I think you are right and I am wrong. I think they are talking about word COUNT and I was seeing it as word USAGE.
ReplyDeleteBut they do state in an ambiguous fashion. I can tell by reading some of the entries that other people are seeing it the way I was, also.
You can't help but grin at the mischievious nature of the character and the writer. good job.
ReplyDeleteYes, it might be safer to pay for meals, but far less challenging! (I worked in restaurants during college and encountered more than a couple dine and dash cutomers.
ReplyDeleteHow Fun!
ReplyDeleteWow. I thought he was in WAY more trouble until the end there. :)
ReplyDeletemy friend was just telling me of a news report about a couple of kids who had decided to play 'diner dash' only to realize their keys were locked in the car. of course, the kids brilliantly thought to call the cops for help. (and, yes, they got arrested.)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the chuckle, Libby!
ReplyDeleteInteresting glimpse...I can see a germ for a short here! :)
ReplyDeleteSorry for the late comment here. So funny--I thought you were going Children of the Corn on us. But a dine and dash is much better. Thanks for linking up.
ReplyDeleteDelightfully done! I have actually been chased through a cornfield once upon a time, but not because I skipped on the meal tab!
ReplyDeleteI enjoy flash writing and will check into the Trifextra Weekend Writing Challenge!